Abenezer’s edited version.
If I were a King for a day, I would ignite a feeling of happiness for others, by providing a haven for the less fortunate. I would enact this by sharing essentials such as food, drinks, money, cleansers …etc. I would also give homeless shelters a ton of money to be invested into the building and supplies that would be purchased for the welfare of the people. As China built a hospital within three days, I WILL build many shelters across my city within 3 hours. I would also hire my professional men to build a hospital within an hour.
If I were a king, I would also adventure the world on my personal mission to find a genie lamp. Once I achieved my goal I would reason with the genie and ask for infinite wishes. Another thing I would ask the genie for would probably be for Gordon Ramsey to be my personal chef, working in my modernized and enchanting gold castle, (as in my opinion Gordon Ramsey is the best chef the world has ever come across
If I were a king
If I were a king, I would make sure that any poor person on the street would have a job even if they were disabled (after all, I would be very rich).
Also, I would buy a genie and ask him for infinite wishes, for example, could I be king forever?
I would ask Gordon Ramsey to be my chef because (in my opinion) he is the best chef in world.
The next thing I would do is give a different charity £500,000 a month.
I would have the powers to fly and would travel around the world (it is my dream too).
That’s all: from Abenezer
Hi Abenezer, I am so pleased you had a go at this. You have certainly made me chuckle. You also indicate a number of charitable acts you would do as a King. very impressed.
Abenezer you are really good at using descriptive writing when we are in class. I would like you to improve this even further by turning it into a descriptive piece of writing, describing your day as King.
Okay Mrs.Bell . Thank you
Should I email to you again?
Yes please.
I emailed the new one that I made
I sent you the new one to you on bgfl
It iz really good
that really good that inspires me to do one of my own
Thanks
This is my version which i personally believe is better.
On the off chance that I were a King for a day, I would light a sentiment of bliss for other people, by giving a safe house to the less lucky. I would institute this by sharing basics, for example, food, drinks, cash, chemicals … and so on. I would likewise give destitute asylums a huge amount of cash to be put into the structure and supplies that would be bought for the government assistance of the individuals. As China assembled a clinic inside three days, I WILL construct numerous asylums over my city inside 3 hours. I would likewise employ my expert men to fabricate an emergency clinic inside 60 minutes.
On the off chance that I were a ruler, I would likewise experience the world on my own strategic discover a genie light. When I accomplished my objective I would prevail upon the genie and request endless wishes. Something else I would approach the genie for would most likely be for Gordon Ramsey to be my own cook, working in my modernized and charming gold stronghold, as I would like to think Gordon Ramsey is the best culinary expert the world has ever gone over.
I must admit Hammad, you have certainly used excellent vocabulary and your sentence construction makes me want to vote you in for Prime minister of the UK; President of the United States of America and King of the world:-)
very good Hammad , but mine is still better
mine is better because mine is original